要点领悟
很多考生在中考书面表达中,常常会错用一些词语,使得评卷老师不知其所云,得分自然不会高。因此,我们在平时的习作训练中就要特别留意词汇的正确使用。
信息提示
李小莉的一个名叫Mary Baker的笔友给她回了一封电子邮件,谈到她对中国的喜爱和向往。请以“An e-mail from an American pen pal”为标题写一封电子邮件。邮件的开头已给出(不计入总词数)。
From: marybaker0892@yahoo.com
To: lixiaolibjcn@163.com
Subject: My wish
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要求:
1. 意思连贯、符合逻辑、书写工整;
2. 词数:85左右。
习作实况
From: marybaker0892@yahoo.com
To: lixiaolibjcn@163.com
Subject: My wish
Dear Li Xiaoli,
I’m glad to receive your e-mail. I’ve showed it to my friends. Everyone (1) of us thinks China is one of the greatest countries in the world. We’ve known much about your country for years, but we have not chance (2) to go there. We often watch the Great Wall and beautiful Beijing on TV. So I think China is worth to visit(3). I bought a book on China and study it when I’m free. I hope I can visit your country one day, and I also hope you to visit (4) our country sometimes (5) in the future.
Truly yours,
Mary Baker
精讲点拨
1. everyone是不定代词,它可以用作主语,但不能和含of的介词短语连用。此处应把Everyone分开,即Every one,或者用Each来替换它。但要注意,这里不能用Every,因为它不能用作主语。
2. chance表示“机会”的意思讲时是可数名词,须和冠词连用。由于该句是否定句,如果在它前面加上any,它需要变成复数。最便捷的办法是,把not换成no,表示not a,如果no后接的名词是复数,它则表示not any。
3. 考生对worth一词的用法显然不清楚。worth常用于be worth doing这一结构。be worth后不能接动词不定式,而要接V-ing形式。因此,应当把to visit改为visiting。
4. hope一词不能用于hope sb. to do sth.结构,如果要表达“希望某人做某事”要用hope接that从句。因此要将you to visit改为you can visit。
5. 应将sometimes改为sometime。sometimes意为“有时”,而sometime 的意思是“某个时间”,指某个不确定或未说明的时间。
精彩例文
From: marybaker0892@yahoo.com
To: lixiaolibjcn@163.com
Subject: My wish
Dear Li Xiaoli,
I’m glad to receive your e-mail. I’ve showed it to my friends. Every one of us thinks China is one of the greatest countries. We’ve known much about your country for years, but we have no chance to go there. We often watch the Great Wall and beautiful Beijing on TV. So I think China is worth visiting. I bought a book on China and study it when I’m free. I hope I can visit your country one day, and I also hope you can visit our country sometime in the future.
Truly yours,
Mary Baker