作为考场上的监考老师,看到考生们拿到作文题时惊恐的表情,为师,心都碎了。 但是,作为资深四级写作阅卷老师,我想告诉你,表害怕,事情没有那么复杂。
显然,四六级考试委员会的砖家们,采用了考研英语二的大作文形式---图表作文。根据题目要求,我们需要 1. give a brief description of the chart first 2. then make comments on it. 那么要求1就是简要描述图表,这也是我们写第1段的任务。要求2的comments(评论)可以拆分成2段:分别是分析原因段,与结论建议段。于是,从文章结构上,我们就确定了全文3段为:
1. 描述图表 2. 分析原因 3. 结论或建议
从文章内容上,第1段当然是总体描述1句,加细节描述1-2句;第2段分析原因,当然是解释为什么教育程度越高,失业率越低?内容仁者见仁,只要没跑题就行。第3段可以给个结论,或者建议大家要重视教育,从官方角度应该怎么做,从民众的角度应该怎么做。
从文章语言上,如何出彩?首先当然避免恶俗词汇,同时可以自然地用一些模块句,但不宜过多,顶多一半;涉及自己写的内容,要是用模块太牵强,那咱就自己写,但如果担心自己语言不行,那也可以写简单点,但必须尽量少出错。
下面,我们总结一下文章结构与内容,
Paragraph I Introduction
1. General description 总体描述 1句
2. Details 细节描述 1-2句
Paragraph II Body
reasons 原因论证
1. 主题句 1句
2. 拓展句 2句 (2个原因)
Paragraph III Conclusion
Conclusion & Suggestions 结论 & 建议
1. 主题句1句
2. 拓展句2句 (2点建议)
最后,给大家一个半模块,半范文。(Ps: 官方范文出炉之前,神马所谓的范文都是浮云,因为改卷老师们不会去看这些范文)
From the statistics given in the above chart, we can clearly see (总体描述: a striking contrast in unemployment rate among those laborers with different degrees or diplomas.) (细节描述: For those who only have less than a high school diploma, the unemployment rate reaches up to 14.9%, while the rate is just about 1.9% for those having a doctoral degree.)
This phenomenon may be attributable to several factors. Firstly, 原因1 (原因自己随便写, 只要我们看得出你写得是原因,就没跑题); Furthermore, 原因2 .
Taking what has been argued above into account, we can come to a conclusion that (结论: the unemployment rate declines sharply with the boost of degrees or diplomas). (建议: Thus, it is indispensable to enhance our education if we intend to acquire a prospective career. 如果你觉得字数够了,就别具体建议了;如果字数不够,那就用上我们上课时谈到的 Thus, I personally suppose some effective measures could be taken to better the condition of 主题. Of all things, the authorities concerned should set down regulations to promote the blossom of education. Meanwhile, we ought to cultivate the awareness that education is influential for a prospective career.)