In the Saturday I first with my brother,my aunt and my mother.but my one brother on come.I and my brother first play water and play swim.behind the one o'clock my one brother is coming to Lanbowang with my play.
点评：这篇文章没有什么可读性，中国式英语太浓。
1.前面几句话连谓语动词都没有；
2.在星期六就用介词on，单个星期前是不用冠词的，正确的说法是On Saturday;
3.在英语里头，表达“我和某某人”时，通常将“我”放在and之后,“我和我弟弟”应该说成"My brother and I";
4.和其人一起玩是“play together”.