One possible version:
Two months ago, Jiaodong Online made a survey on what junior Grade 4 students would do after graduation. Here is the result.
65% of us hope to be admitted to the senior schools. About 20% would like to learn useful skills at technical schools so as to get jobs easily after graduation. And 10% of the students will find jobs to make money to support their families. Only 5% are not quite sure about their aims. I think they should make it clear what to do next.
In my opinion, we teenagers should have a definite design for our future life. Different students have different aims and of course they may change with the time.
My dream is to be a doctor to serve the patients. So, I am determined to work hard at all my lessons so that I can enter Beijing Medical University. I’m ready for a hard but colorful senior school life.
书面表达评分标准:
1.本题总分为15分,按五个档次给分。
2.评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言表达的流畅、准确程度等确定其所属档次,然后以该档次要求来确定本档次得分。出现考生个人信息不得分。
3.作文词数不少于100,否则扣1分。
4.书写不规范,卷面不整洁,扣1分。
5.各档次的给分范围和要求:
第一档(14-15分):要点全面,能正确表述自己的观点,行文流畅,无语法和词汇错误。
第二档(11-13分):能写出绝大部分要点,行文基本流畅,有少量语法和词汇错误。
第三档(8-10分):写出大部分要点,行文尚通顺,有一些语法和词汇错误。
第四档(5-7分):只写出部分要点,语言不通顺,有很多语法和词汇错误。
第五档(0-4分):基本上没有实际内容,语法及拼写错误太多,不知所云。