Hello, my name is Lin Min.I live in ChangAn town.I study in No.1 primary school.I like my school.I go to school from Monday to Friday.And I like my weekend too.On Saturdays,I do homework in the morning.Then I eat lunch.I play computer games in the afternoon.I can play computer games only one hour.I play the piano at three o’clock.I like playing the piano. I can listen to music in the evening.I think it is so funny.On Sundays, I often learn English.In the evening.I must go to bed early,because tomorrow I will go to school.
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